File: bowsette boogie.swf-(3.09 MB, 1920x1080, Hentai)
[_] MonstrousFrog 3368308 Song by Qumu: https://youtu.be/le2gIwYx0Qo Marked for deletion (old).
>> [_] MonstrousFrog 3368310 Shit I fucked up my watermark and sent it to the wrong address It's actually MonstrousFrog.tumblr.com
>> [_] Anon 3368311 holy shit, this is so poorly drawn it hurts to look at those proportions are disgusting
>> [_] Anon 3368313 wow thats awful
>> [_] Anon 3368316 >># Seconded. This is trash.
>> [_] Anon 3368317 >Somone spent a serious amount of time and effort on this >Somone looked at this and decided "Yeah I'll put this out for everyone to see" I don't know if this person is delusional or idiotic. If the creator is reading this, I'm sorry but please go back to the drawing board and reconsider your future
>> [_] MonstrousFrog 3368320 Woah okay, wasn't expecting such a passionate reaction! >># I spent like a day and a bit on it but okay Genuine question: is there anything specific about it that you guys find so off-putting? Anything that you'd like to see done differently? Stylistically speaking, are you guys finding it uncanny? Too much gravity on the breasts? Too cartoony? Not Cartoony enough? I'm relatively new to the whole nsfw game and I'm happy to take notes if you guys want to give real feedback
>> [_] Anon 3368321 >># more keyframes more hips more meat on those bones, bowser is huge and muscular, bowsette should be Strong-T H I C C
>> [_] MonstrousFrog 3368322 >># To be honest I held back on the thiccness after a previous thicc animation received a similar degree of disgust and anger from /f/ Maybe I should just stay true to my love of the Meat
>> [_] Anon 3368323 >># My man, You did fine. Could use some refining but it looks as it generally should relative the time spent. Its sharp and stylized which I find appealing and appreciate. A great job animating ease of motion and very well done making it move as if the proportions are natural. You keep it up.
>> [_] Anon 3368324 >># I should add that the lack of strict key frames looks pretty good for what is functionally a draft piece.
>> [_] MonstrousFrog 3368325 >># Wow okay, thanks man!
>> [_] Anon 3368326 >># THIS ok, it's in Flash, it's vector, but that's where it stops, this is an ABOMINATION OF DRAWING
>> [_] Anon 3368327 >># That's a bit much. But hey, that's you I suppose.
>> [_] Anon 3368329 The art is bad. The poses, the music, the pacing, it's fine. But the style itself, It's grotesquely distorted and overly-cartoonish.
>> [_] Anon 3368330 >># "Overly-cartoonish", in my opinion at least, should never be considered a bad thing on its own. Proportion can be altered for styles sake. And while it is always within your right to say something inst appealing to you, to call it "bad art" isn't very cash money of you. The proportion is consistent from frame to frame and you said yourself the poses are fine. Seems to me your gripe is just the proportions, which I wont say I'm sexually into, but its by no means ugly, by my standards at least.
>> [_] Anon 3368333 >># It's those knees yo That's not "delicious thigh squish" that's "badly packed sausage" The knees have too much detail by like 230% And the boobs shouldn't swing below the bellybutton imo but that's a ymmv thing Really you've gotta pick a side on the art. It's too detailed (knees, detail lines in crotch, extra pivot at the waist, constriction around the leg-hip joints that make her thighs look like they're on upside down, weird way boobs attach to chest) to be charmingly cartoony simplistic but not proportionate enough to be semirealistic. On the other hand, I like the way you do the color cell details and highlights and shading. You might want to stick to those strengths instead of investing so much time in the lines. The shoulder movement animation is good, the hip movement animation is not. It needs more frames. At least one more decel frame at the end of each swing, and at least one not-quick-halfway frame in the bottom of the swing. Never forget that you're making OC, which makes you better than the rest of us /f/aggots. Practice more. When only 2/3 responses are hateful you're doing awesome. Remember how much everyone hates on -8, and his shit is great.
>> [_] Anon 3368334 I'd say that everything is solid on it's own merit. But since this is supposed to have some porn factor it requires a little more out of the art style. Nothing really wrong with the art, but it's not something I'd like to associate with sexiness. The legs are proportioned in probably the only way that could be kind of gross. The rest of the body is just a tad over exaggerated in proportion but could be worse. Personally I don't like the face, it's kinda annoying to look at, but I'm really picky about how faces are done, so take that point with a fat grain of salt.
>> [_] Anon 3368335 >># probably have to agree with this anon. face is a bit off putting, and the art doesnt mesh well with porn. idk. Like >># said, at least you're making content so I guess you're better than me.
>> [_] MonstrousFrog 3368337 Thanks for the feedback, guys! Great points and I'm takin this all on board
>> [_] Anon 3368338 Some people should never animate or draw the same way some people should never try singing or dancing. It just doesn't work for some, it's not in their blood, and I'm sorry to say but you have skills for neither drawing nor animating. Have you ever considered you aren't cut out for it?
>> [_] Anon 3368339 >># It's terrible.
>> [_] Anon 3368344 i appreciate the flash and i absolutely want you to make more of them, but i dont get the appeal of saggy tits
>> [_] Anon 3368347 >># >is there anything specific about it that you guys find so off-putting? specifically, the entire fucking thing.
>> [_] Anon 3368348 >># Honestly the face isn't appealing, and when the face isn't appealing everything suddenly gets a whole lot harder to fap to. The haircut is short and boyish, her lips don't extend to the ends of her mouth and a lot of details are stupidly big. It doesn't help that that's the first thing you see when you open up the flash.
>> [_] Anon 3368350 Dude, just try and change your whole art style to be honest (while your faces on the characters are not bad, certain things like making the belly on your characters too thin makes it look like a stick and that's no bueno, it doesn't look appealing like that), talking from experience as a nsfw drawer myself too, you shouldn't make the thighs like that, like someone mention before it makes it look like a bad packed sausage instead of a quite appealing thigh, you gotta work on the knees of your characters and not make it to be too packed, give it more meat, it certainly looks like if if was only bone damn lol; I hope this doesn't seem mean spirited, I really want you to make it better so we can really appreciate completely your work, I still appreciate that you made it, I certainly love the face of bowsette in this, but you can certainly do better man! hopefully you tke this feedback and apply it, thanks for reading it anyways!
>> [_] Anon 3368351 lol
>> [_] Anon 3368362 >># saggy tits, anorexic everything, weird face, not completely nude.
>> [_] Anon 3368376 >># Ignore this anon's last bit Partially clothed is better than fully nude
>> [_] Anon 3368379 Needs more sex appeal. The style is akin to a cartoon for kids about animals in a forest. Draw more curves, accent the hips and feminine features. Right now it looks like an N64 SS polygon frame is dancing
>> [_] Anon 3368380 >># needs to be thiccer saggy titties saggy looking thigh meat instead of nice and thicc those kneeeees the calves are too big ultra large forehead those lips the really important bit is >># >That's not "delicious thigh squish" that's "badly packed sausage"
>> [_] Anon 3368383 >># How about learning how to fucking draw?
>> [_] Anon 3368384 >># The only thing wrong with this is the actual design of the character. She looks like someones weird saggy grandma because she's like thin and fat at the same time. The animation and movement of the character is fine. Overall don't delete it just because you're getting some negative feedback. This is definitely someones fetish.
>> [_] Anon 3368385 the style is like you've never seen bowsette or even peach for that matter and someone just described her to you and you were like "okay i'll give it a shot..." just really wack body proportions and grotesque face. just looks like a strange misinterpretation of the character its supposed to be. other than that the animation and pacing is fine. more keyframes would be nice so she's not just jumping from one side of the screen to the other.
>> [_] Anon 3368401 >># If you can't tell what's wrong with it at a glance, there's something wrong with you.
>> [_] Anon 3368403 Of course it's from tumblr. People need to learn some humility and actually get decent at things before they go around showing everyone. This is the equivalent of buying a shitty old guitar and learning to play smoke on the water out of key and off tempo and then going out and playing it for everyone you can get to listen.
>> [_] Anon 3368404 HOLY SHIT THIS IS TERRIBLE
>> [_] Anon 3368405 >># Its shit on every level, the design is shit, she looks ugly, the music is absolut fucking shit. You even fucked up your own link.
>> [_] Anon 3368422 Looking at your original art I can appreciate your attempt at animation, your technical lvl seems fine and looks pretty polished overall despite your incredibly rough character design. Speaking of your character design I'm thinking most people find the extremely exaggerated proportions offputting, I'd like to put SLB's tumblr forward as an example for how to deal with that shit in a satisfying manner (though still too out-there for some) Keep at it my dude
>> [_] Anon 3368425 >># >># >># >># >># >># >># "real feedback"
>> [_] Anon 3368435 I'm afraid I don't have anything constructive to say, as I'm not artistically inclined. I only speak up because I think it's important to encourage those who earnestly seek out criticism to better themselves. I hope you will wipe away the anger and vitriol and discover something for yourself. I'm rooting for you. "If you only do things you're good at, you'll never learn anything." - John Cena tl;dr fuck the haters
>> [_] Anon 3368438 >># The appeal is that they're so heavy and large, that they have to sag. Her's aren't nearly big enough imho
>> [_] Noppers 3368447 The face is pretty darn bad, being too wide in the forehead and the shadow where the nose should be makes it look like if it were dented inside in the middle, kind of like a bent coin. The tits are saggy as if they were two loaves of wet bread. The butt fangs are only comparable to count chocula. The neck is way too thick and long for the proportions. The legs start well but go to the rash when the boots start, like another anon said, badly packaged sausages, those knees are also very very bad. I would say the knees and facial structure need fixing. Your artstyle works for some stuff, but definitely not for something that's intended to be sexy or erotic.
>> [_] Anon 3368448 >># ya need more LOOMIS O O M I S
>> [_] Anon 3368449 >># >Looking for "real feedback" on fucking 4chan of all places lmao. You'd sooner find more constructive criticism if this was featured in a roast comedy special.
>> [_] Anon 3368459 Don't use as many corners, like make some of it rounder. Maybe the proportions are a bit off too, try something different with the face.
>> [_] Anon 3368460 If you're reading this author, probably so few people have this weird saggy tit fetish you have. I think you posted another flash like this a couple weeks ago. To the average person this shit you like is just disgusting and not in any way attractive. You'd fit in more on like a furry website or something like deviant art.
>> [_] Anon 3368466 >># Her nipples are literally the size of her waist. Too much forehead, not enough hair. Fat legs, everything else skeletor. Neck height is almost the length of her forearm. Chest doesnt even exist. Honestly most of the issues anyone on /f can point out are just common bias. If you want some real feedback or to get properly chewed out, go to /ic/ and post in beginner thread or style thread.
>> [_] Anon 3368467 >># Came here to post this.
>> [_] Anon 3368475 >># >Genuine question: is there anything specific about it that you guys find so off-putting? Hmmm... It looks like it was drawn by a crippled baby monkey with a broken crayon. Not trying to dig, just an observation. it really doesn't even work as caricature, it's just really bad scribbling. Work on style, like, alot, and spend more than a day farting out a flash. Good art takes time and care. And style.
>> [_] Anon 3368479 >># seconding this moar loomis