File: H 002_v4.swf-(70 KB, Hentai)
[_] Original Content Anonymous 03/03/13(Sun)07:05 No.1902290
Rate my OC plz. Suggestions & advices are welcome.
Advance through the animation with Left and Right keys.
Marked for deletion (old).
>> [_] Anonymous 03/03/13(Sun)07:25 No.1902298
Animation is pretty good, but having certain things as different layers (left arm, tits,
neck/right arm) makes the animation look really jagged and un natural.
Lower body should move in addition to the upper body (just slight up and down movements would be
enough)
A bit of animation work and this would be 10/10.
>> [_] Anonymous 03/03/13(Sun)07:31 No.1902302
pros :
animation is very fluent and smooth
colors look great
cons :
maybe needs options, like change hair color or makeup
boobs clip with the chest at some frames, and they need to jiggle more.
bretty guud/10 dont stop working on it
>> [_] Anonymous 03/03/13(Sun)08:24 No.1902323
best 72 kb i had
>> [_] Anonymous 03/03/13(Sun)08:45 No.1902333
The tongue animation seems a bit strange.
Also, make it more clear that they use the arrow keys to advance.
>> [_] Anonymous 03/03/13(Sun)08:48 No.1902334
Nice constructive criticism! I'm proud of you guys.
>> [_] Anonymous 03/03/13(Sun)08:56 No.1902339
Fix her left arm, make her abdomen actually exist, and make her look more human in general.
Other than that, 9.5/10 it's okay.
>> [_] Anonymous 03/03/13(Sun)09:57 No.1902376
Also needs voices and a background
>> [_] Anonymous 03/03/13(Sun)11:22 No.1902430
more facial expression would make it definitely better!
>> [_] Anonymous 03/03/13(Sun)11:31 No.1902442
dem shiny tits. shit is glowing yo
>> [_] Anonymous 03/03/13(Sun)12:04 No.1902473
All I can ask is that you do more. Blease for the lub of gob, go more!
>> [_] Anonymous 03/03/13(Sun)12:58 No.1902523
I'll repeat what I said in the thread on /h/
"Ok, well, her left arm doesn't look great, anatomically speaking. It's too low and doesn't seem
to connect to the rest of her body properly. Her breasts look a little too low as well and her
hand just looks weird when she's holding his penis at the base and moves to her mouth.
Other than that, it's not bad, but it might be worth considering adding more detail in places,
especially on the penis and her upper body, considering that's a main focus. Also, I figure it's
probably pretty difficult to make good looking cum, but maybe try some more detail with it anyway.
I assume you already had this in mind as well, but a reset button would be nice. And maybe an
option to cum on her face.
Still, it's a hell of a lot better than anything I could do. Keep up the good work, I'd love to
see how it turns out."
>> [_] Anonymous 03/03/13(Sun)13:00 No.1902528
>>1902442
She is a well-oiled machine. Baby oil.
