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[_] [H] OC Hentai Game, need advice Anonymous 07/15/11(Fri)16:19 No.1537017
Yo making some H.
Need some critique, this is all I got for now but what do you guys think?
Should I change colors around, speed it up, add shading?
Hit me my niggas
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>> [_] Anonymous 07/15/11(Fri)16:39 No.1537023
cmon now hit MEHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH (mehemehemehemehemehemehemehemehemehe) upo
>> [_] Anonymous 07/15/11(Fri)17:03 No.1537031
I think the girl is kind of cute so I'll try to be constructive.
The shapes need to be smoother. Her right eye is drawn above some of the hair. The empty space in
her ribbon should be transparent, because on the top left it's clear that there shouldn't be hair
directly behind the ribbon like that. The hair moving around too much relative to her head, and
the way she bobs her head without moving her neck is just weird. The pupil expansion effect also
looks strange. A little shading probably wouldn't hurt, but it should be subtle. Really, it needs
more polish before I can give stylistic recommendations.
>> [_] Anonymous 07/15/11(Fri)17:19 No.1537036
She has a little Cthulhu on her head!
>> [_] vault boy !5eXivJPL.A 07/15/11(Fri)19:00 No.1537082
how do i start it?
>> [_] Antopathos 07/15/11(Fri)19:41 No.1537093
>>1537031
>The pupil expansion effect also looks strange
I believe you can make that happen with drugs.
Which in itself could be a funny feature in the game. Feed her drugs for various effects.
>> [_] Anonymous 07/15/11(Fri)20:52 No.1537114
Penis is a little bit too transparent - I can see her hair through it.
>> [_] Anonymous 07/15/11(Fri)23:07 No.1537152
just a word: KAWAIV~
now seiously u are mading a H flash game? well the girl is too cute... the colors are like miku
hatsune (only on da hair but its ok), when u finish it post it or tellme yaH company name, and i
will folow yo progres from there, i will cooperate criticizing :d... i see a great future for you
and this game, I can see it in the mashed potatoes, and the bowl of curry (yeh im a foodreader)
>> [_] Anonymous 07/15/11(Fri)23:34 No.1537160
smooth the lines out, soul brotha.
try to use a single line to do the edge of each object. edit it manually if need be.
>> [_] Anonymous 07/15/11(Fri)23:46 No.1537163
>>1537031
I felt like that was a big problem too. This is the first H flash i've actually ever tried
making. so its going to be a rough start.
> ribbon
> bobbing
> dam pupils
>>1537093
I cannot script for shit homie... lol we'll see.
>>1537152
Yo i got no company. For now I'm going to make a website. Build up my gallery, make everything
free. And EVENTUALLY when I start getting the flow down I'm going to start charging money. I'll
defiantly be up for commissions too.
One thing I thought about was for the first few people who actually register to my site when its
free, I'll give them free memberships & ect. So maybe by the end of the summer I'll have a site
up dude. And if I do register that shit up and I'll hook you up!
>> [_] Anonymous 07/15/11(Fri)23:49 No.1537165
>>1537114
I kinda wanna keep this simple for me right now. Transparent pp gives me some less stress while
editing and making the basic fundymentlz ect yada yada yada
Also thx for the feedback guys. I actually thought I'd just get flamed and told to an hero.
>>1537160
I should probably bump up my smoothness next time. everythings already drawn out, this is just a
little project to give me an idea how to do things. I will remember that though
>> [_] Anonymous 07/16/11(Sat)01:27 No.1537204
GHOST PENIS!
>> [_] Anonymous 07/16/11(Sat)02:17 No.1537222
SHe's cute but there does need to be some line smoothing and touch ups... especially in the eyes
and hair.
