File: AP.swf-(125 KB, 650x490, Loop)
[_] Critique Please Anonymous 12/30/13(Mon)03:24 No.2241748
It's a simple loop animation.
There's plenty of spots to work on, but I'd like to know how it's coming along as it is now.
Hopefully I can get a cleaner version posted tomorrow.
>> [_] Anonymous 12/30/13(Mon)03:39 No.2241762
>OC of any kind, ever
Godspeed you pervert.
>> [_] Anonymous 12/30/13(Mon)03:54 No.2241776
Dude it's great. Honestly the art is great if not simple, not to say that simple is bad. Anyways,
keep this quality of art and animation and expand it into a full fuckfest and you could have
something magical here.
>> [_] Anonymous 12/30/13(Mon)03:54 No.2241778
I like it
>> [_] Anonymous 12/30/13(Mon)03:55 No.2241779
Holy shit. Since when did /f/ have captcha?!?! Don't mean to be off topic but it just took me by
surprise.
>> [_] Anonymous 12/30/13(Mon)03:56 No.2241782
That there’s some good in this world, Mr. Frodo. And it’s worth fighting for.
>> [_] Anonymous 12/30/13(Mon)04:10 No.2241798
Dead eyes. You might want to angle them down a bit. If you're feeling really ballsy, you can try
making them move to keep focus on the dude's pelvic bone.
>> [_] Anonymous 12/30/13(Mon)04:14 No.2241804
Better than alot I've seen and better than anything I could do.
But I will say the tweening is noticeable on the head in the form of slight smooshing and the
angle of the breast is too sharp for my liking.
But don't let my criticism get you down, it is not my type of porn but I will say many will fap
to this if it is as you say incomplete.
Jolly good show OP, Jolly good.
>> [_] Anonymous 12/30/13(Mon)04:14 No.2241807
Her nipples seem kinda high up
>> [_] Anonymous 12/30/13(Mon)04:20 No.2241813
Her boobs are coming out of her shoulders.
>> [_] Anonymous 12/30/13(Mon)04:21 No.2241817
The boobs are a little weird, and the face looks stiff and unfocused, but other than that, it
looks great. inb4 Zone 2.0.
>> [_] Anonymous 12/30/13(Mon)04:25 No.2241825
I can tell that her face is all one object that you're warping. Break it up into parts and vary
your line widths so it doesn't feel so dead.
>> [_] Anonymous 12/30/13(Mon)04:27 No.2241827
>>2241825
Oh, and I understand that you want to get a good shot of her tits, but they're too high up. On an
adult the base of the breasts is about one head length below the chin. On a child it will be
slightly higher, relative to the head, but that's still a good starting place. Maybe re-frame the
animation to get this right.
>> [_] Anonymous 12/30/13(Mon)04:33 No.2241836
Boobs too high
Too large next movements, she looks like potato knish at one point.
otherwise it looks alright i think
>> [_] Anonymous 12/30/13(Mon)04:37 No.2241839
I second the boobs issue.
The eyes are drawn nice, but moving/focusing eyes is a very nice detail if you can add it. If she
would look up at his face or down or blink it would add to the realism.
>> [_] ℛℯℳ¤ !PHANTOM2V2 12/30/13(Mon)04:43 No.2241841
>https://www.dropbox.com/s/8ohrbg6f27faxt9/LoliCritique.
jpg
I just picked out a few things i noticed.
I really like your art style, and overall this thing looks amazing.
>> [_] Anonymous 12/30/13(Mon)05:36 No.2241895
Holy shit dude. Are you the guy who did that Ruto animation?
If so mad props.
>> [_] Anonymous 12/30/13(Mon)07:34 No.2241947
Thank you guys for the info, I'll be sure to work on the adjustments!
>> [_] Anonymous 12/30/13(Mon)07:59 No.2241954
Movements are a bit jerky, try to make the motion more fluid.
>> [_] Anonymous 12/30/13(Mon)08:29 No.2241967
>>2241748
sounds? hwere?
>> [_] Anonymous 12/30/13(Mon)09:36 No.2241985
sauce
>> [_] John Moses Browning 12/30/13(Mon)10:10 No.2241992
I could watch this for a long time
but she doesn't blink and this would scare the fuck out of me.
Maybe you can put a speed regulator in your loop so we can change speed.
Everything else like perfect in my eyes
