File[Straight_Shota_03.swf] - (147 KB)
[_] [H] Straight Shota request filled! Brown on boy Iyae 11/29/09(Sun)15:59 No.1127360
So NotBanana reminded me of an important concept: Use reference! I was able to find something
close for the woman, but unable to find something for the boy
Eitherway, enjoy. I believe the request was a brown chick ontop, boy on bottom.
C&C welcome as always. Can't improve if I don't know whats right/wrong.
>> [_] Suika !IbukiozMj2 11/29/09(Sun)17:39 No.1127437
It looks like his phallus is brown.
>> [_] Giant !uqReqKm5Zk 11/29/09(Sun)19:06 No.1127471
Perhaps a climax function? More facials expressions as well.
>> [_] Anonymous 11/29/09(Sun)19:35 No.1127491
yeah, a few more animations
>> [_] Anonymous 11/29/09(Sun)19:45 No.1127495
sucks, animation sucks
>> [_] Anonymous 11/29/09(Sun)19:53 No.1127500
Wow, that was a fast turnaround. I circled the things I changed:
Her right arm: I couldn't change this since it looks fine in the still image, but it's just
animated a little funny.
Her left arm: The fore-arm is TINY compared to the part after the elbow.
His foot: It could use a little rotation so it doesn't seem like it was stuck in a Japanese
foot-binding shoe D:
My MS paint skills can't fix it, oh well.
His right arm: Just a little less of a crease.
Otherwise, wow, great job.
- ms paint guy
>> [_] Anonymous 11/29/09(Sun)19:53 No.1127503
>>1127500
http://img109.imageshack.us/img109/3276/aaasdfsfffff.jpg
forgot my link
>> [_] Anonymous 11/29/09(Sun)20:37 No.1127529
The Torso is very undefined.
Needs curves.
>> [_] Iyae 11/29/09(Sun)20:38 No.1127530
>>1127471
Hm, that's a good plan, faces are a bit stiff. In my next one I shall add more facial animation.
And god damn, that's a good idea... Maybe put in a money shot in my next one. Actually, yeah, I
think I'll do that. Fuck yeah.
>>1127437
Oops, my bad, thought I was just darkening it a bit to make it seem wet. Guess I overdid it eh?
>>1127495
They see me trollan', they hatin'
A huge list of flaws/defects will deter me more than this :3c
>>1127500
The elbow did bother me aswell, its as if I made that area too thick (probably did) where the
upper arm meets as too thin, giving it an odd proportion. When I did his food I did stuggle to
find a view (had no ref. for him) so that was what I cam up with. It was close enough. And the
fold in his arm was a bit much, I see it now.
Now then, For the my animation...
WHAT SHALL IT BE?
>> [_] Anonymous 11/29/09(Sun)20:41 No.1127532
>>1127530
Human/furry mix
>> [_] Anonymous 11/29/09(Sun)20:51 No.1127542
Few speculations from an Anonymous flash artist:
Her torso looks too "square". The torso should have more of a pear and/or hourglass shape to
extenuate her curves. The biggest issue is underneath her LEFT armpit. You can see her torso is
virtually a straight line and it looks terribly awkward.
...
>> [_] Anonymous 11/29/09(Sun)20:51 No.1127543
>>1127532
lolusrs?
>>1127529
I'll make a note to watch my torso detail for the next. Thanks for the reminder.
>> [_] Anonymous 11/29/09(Sun)20:52 No.1127546
...
There's also too much space between her head and her chest. If you look at yourself in the mirror
and compare the distance between your nipple (assuming you're a male) and your chin while
standing up straight, you'll see what I mean.
Her left hand doesn't stay on her thigh when she slides.
Her right eye is too small, and her mouth is too far on the left side of her face. I understand
"animu" proportions are taking place her so you may feel that you can justify this but I
personally feel they are awkward.
This a decent start; not just in this particular flash but in future flashes as well. If you
decide to ditch this project, just keep all these things in mind so you will not make the same
mistakes as last time. Good luck.
>> [_] Anonymous 11/29/09(Sun)20:52 No.1127547
This woman has no fucking hips. She looks like a post-op tranny.
>> [_] Iyae 11/29/09(Sun)21:00 No.1127551
>>1127542
>>1127546
Nice list of things. I'm not continuing this project but I will very much keep these things in
mind. I didn't even notice that I didn't keep her hand moving with her thigh as she moved.
So things I've learned thus far:
Watch the size of of limbs so they match
Make sure everything has an animation, no matter how small
Watch bodily curves, as I was making them too square
>>1127547
Hm, you think that? I don't perticularly see it, but if someone can point it out for me I'd be
appreciative.
Thanks again for everyones help. One day I shall be able to provide grand porn for all, huzza!
Also folks, still need an idea for next project
So far what was pitched was only Human/furry mix.
>> [_] Anonymous 11/29/09(Sun)21:12 No.1127561
>>1127551
It's hard to point out the hips - they seemed fine to me, but I can see how they look a little
lacking.
As for suggestions, uhhhhhhhh uhhh uhhhhhh. I thought about a hot librarian after the library
closes, but I think most people find librarians un-sexy.
>> [_] Anonymous 11/29/09(Sun)21:13 No.1127563
>>1127551
Not furry, please. What sort of projects are you doing now? I haven't been keeping up with /f/
>> [_] Anonymous 11/29/09(Sun)21:13 No.1127564
>1127360
Always happy to help, BTW do you 30sec drawing with posemaniacs every day? I do, and it helps me
ALOT.
>> [_] Anonymous 11/29/09(Sun)21:15 No.1127567
>>1127564
I do actually! Its alot of fun, I only finish completly about 1 out of every 50 of so though...
haha
>>1127563
I do mostly anything, but I have a heavy preference to Shota, straight shota, loli, tentacle
rape, etc. Those types of things
>>1127561
Librarian / student sounds really fun actually, that's at the top of my list so far
>> [_] Anonymous 11/29/09(Sun)21:18 No.1127569
>>1127567
Combine all your preferences in one
>> [_] NotBanana 11/29/09(Sun)21:18 No.1127570
>>1127564
Fuck I forgot to put my name in >.<
>> [_] Anonymous 11/29/09(Sun)21:19 No.1127571
>>1127551
Please not furry. A boy with cat-ears, and possibly a tail would be acceptable, but paws or a
nose or any other features is sort of crossing a line. There's already enough furry shit on here,
don't take away our chance for quality SS.
>> [_] Anonymous 11/29/09(Sun)21:21 No.1127573
>>1127571
The funny thing is that if you show a random guy on the street a girl with fake cat ears, he goes
"damn. sexy."
If you show that to someone who's been on the internet, he goes "FURRY"
(Disclaimer: Not a furry, I just think that's odd)
>>1127569
Oh god. That would be hilarious, but impossible.
>> [_] Anonymous 11/29/09(Sun)21:22 No.1127575
>>1127569
A tentacle woman analy tentacle raping a boy who is raping a loli? That seems a bit too in depth
haha.
>>1127570
Ah so it was you, I was confused and thought you were the other guy
>>1127571
Unless its requested that this boy has cat ears and a tail I probably wont add it in (More shit
to animate = fffffuck that)
>> [_] Anonymous 11/29/09(Sun)21:23 No.1127576
>>1127575
I was thinking shota using tentacle monster to restrain loli while raping her.
>> [_] Anonymous 11/29/09(Sun)21:24 No.1127577
I'd like to personally request no loli :X
>> [_] Anonymous 11/29/09(Sun)21:28 No.1127579
In a library.
>> [_] Anonymous 11/29/09(Sun)21:30 No.1127580
>>1127579
Loli can be somewhat furry.
>> [_] Anonymous 11/29/09(Sun)21:31 No.1127584
>>1127577
I'd like to personally request you shut your goddamn mouth.
>> [_] Anonymous 11/29/09(Sun)21:33 No.1127587
>>1127584
And that you shut your goddamn whore mouth
I'm leaving in a few minutes, please 1-up me before I have to go
