File: bowsette boogie.swf-(3.09 MB, 1920x1080, Hentai)
[_] MonstrousFrog 11/15/18(Thu)23:49:42 No.3368308
Song by Qumu: https://youtu.be/le2gIwYx0Qo
Marked for deletion (old).
>> [_] MonstrousFrog 11/15/18(Thu)23:52:48 No.3368310
Shit I fucked up my watermark and sent it to the wrong address
It's actually MonstrousFrog.tumblr.com
>> [_] Anonymous 11/15/18(Thu)23:55:22 No.3368311
holy shit, this is so poorly drawn it hurts to look at
those proportions are disgusting
>> [_] Anonymous 11/16/18(Fri)00:16:31 No.3368313
wow thats awful
>> [_] Anonymous 11/16/18(Fri)00:46:58 No.3368316
>>3368311
Seconded. This is trash.
>> [_] Anonymous 11/16/18(Fri)00:58:17 No.3368317
>Somone spent a serious amount of time and effort on this
>Somone looked at this and decided "Yeah I'll put this out for everyone to see"
I don't know if this person is delusional or idiotic. If the creator is reading this, I'm sorry
but please go back to the drawing board and reconsider your future
>> [_] MonstrousFrog 11/16/18(Fri)01:22:28 No.3368320
Woah okay, wasn't expecting such a passionate reaction!
>>3368317
I spent like a day and a bit on it but okay
Genuine question: is there anything specific about it that you guys find so off-putting? Anything
that you'd like to see done differently? Stylistically speaking, are you guys finding it uncanny?
Too much gravity on the breasts? Too cartoony? Not Cartoony enough?
I'm relatively new to the whole nsfw game and I'm happy to take notes if you guys want to give
real feedback
>> [_] Anonymous 11/16/18(Fri)01:28:10 No.3368321
>>3368320
more keyframes
more hips
more meat on those bones, bowser is huge and muscular, bowsette should be Strong-T H I C C
>> [_] MonstrousFrog 11/16/18(Fri)01:31:07 No.3368322
>>3368321
To be honest I held back on the thiccness after a previous thicc animation received a similar
degree of disgust and anger from /f/
Maybe I should just stay true to my love of the Meat
>> [_] Anonymous 11/16/18(Fri)01:32:56 No.3368323
>>3368320
My man, You did fine. Could use some refining but it looks as it generally should relative the
time spent. Its sharp and stylized which I find appealing and appreciate. A great job animating
ease of motion and very well done making it move as if the proportions are natural. You keep it
up.
>> [_] Anonymous 11/16/18(Fri)01:34:48 No.3368324
>>3368323
I should add that the lack of strict key frames looks pretty good for what is functionally a
draft piece.
>> [_] MonstrousFrog 11/16/18(Fri)01:35:14 No.3368325
>>3368323
Wow okay, thanks man!
>> [_] Anonymous 11/16/18(Fri)01:38:44 No.3368326
>>3368311
THIS
ok, it's in Flash, it's vector, but that's where it stops, this is an ABOMINATION OF DRAWING
>> [_] Anonymous 11/16/18(Fri)01:42:22 No.3368327
>>3368326
That's a bit much. But hey, that's you I suppose.
>> [_] Anonymous 11/16/18(Fri)01:47:02 No.3368329
The art is bad.
The poses, the music, the pacing, it's fine.
But the style itself, It's grotesquely distorted and overly-cartoonish.
>> [_] Anonymous 11/16/18(Fri)02:01:53 No.3368330
>>3368329
"Overly-cartoonish", in my opinion at least, should never be considered a bad thing on its own.
Proportion can be altered for styles sake. And while it is always within your right to say
something inst appealing to you, to call it "bad art" isn't very cash money of you. The
proportion is consistent from frame to frame and you said yourself the poses are fine. Seems to
me your gripe is just the proportions, which I wont say I'm sexually into, but its by no means
ugly, by my standards at least.
>> [_] Anonymous 11/16/18(Fri)02:27:58 No.3368333
>>3368320
It's those knees yo
That's not "delicious thigh squish" that's "badly packed sausage"
The knees have too much detail by like 230%
And the boobs shouldn't swing below the bellybutton imo but that's a ymmv thing
Really you've gotta pick a side on the art. It's too detailed (knees, detail lines in crotch,
extra pivot at the waist, constriction around the leg-hip joints that make her thighs look like
they're on upside down, weird way boobs attach to chest) to be charmingly cartoony simplistic but
not proportionate enough to be semirealistic.
On the other hand, I like the way you do the color cell details and highlights and shading. You
might want to stick to those strengths instead of investing so much time in the lines.
The shoulder movement animation is good, the hip movement animation is not. It needs more frames.
At least one more decel frame at the end of each swing, and at least one not-quick-halfway frame
in the bottom of the swing.
Never forget that you're making OC, which makes you better than the rest of us /f/aggots.
Practice more. When only 2/3 responses are hateful you're doing awesome. Remember how much
everyone hates on -8, and his shit is great.
>> [_] Anonymous 11/16/18(Fri)02:36:45 No.3368334
I'd say that everything is solid on it's own merit. But since this is supposed to have some porn
factor it requires a little more out of the art style.
Nothing really wrong with the art, but it's not something I'd like to associate with sexiness.
The legs are proportioned in probably the only way that could be kind of gross. The rest of the
body is just a tad over exaggerated in proportion but could be worse.
Personally I don't like the face, it's kinda annoying to look at, but I'm really picky about how
faces are done, so take that point with a fat grain of salt.
>> [_] Anonymous 11/16/18(Fri)02:39:57 No.3368335
>>3368334
probably have to agree with this anon. face is a bit off putting, and the art doesnt mesh well
with porn. idk.
Like >>3368333 said, at least you're making content so I guess you're better than me.
>> [_] MonstrousFrog 11/16/18(Fri)02:46:59 No.3368337
Thanks for the feedback, guys! Great points and I'm takin this all on board
>> [_] Anonymous 11/16/18(Fri)03:12:55 No.3368338
Some people should never animate or draw the same way some people should never try singing or
dancing.
It just doesn't work for some, it's not in their blood, and I'm sorry to say but you have skills
for neither drawing nor animating. Have you ever considered you aren't cut out for it?
>> [_] Anonymous 11/16/18(Fri)03:14:11 No.3368339
>>3368323
It's terrible.
>> [_] Anonymous 11/16/18(Fri)05:42:28 No.3368344
i appreciate the flash and i absolutely want you to make more of them, but i dont get the appeal
of saggy tits
>> [_] Anonymous 11/16/18(Fri)05:51:23 No.3368347
>>3368320
>is there anything specific about it that you guys find so off-putting?
specifically, the entire fucking thing.
>> [_] Anonymous 11/16/18(Fri)06:19:26 No.3368348
>>3368320
Honestly the face isn't appealing, and when the face isn't appealing everything suddenly gets a
whole lot harder to fap to.
The haircut is short and boyish, her lips don't extend to the ends of her mouth and a lot of
details are stupidly big. It doesn't help that that's the first thing you see when you open up
the flash.
>> [_] Anonymous 11/16/18(Fri)06:34:29 No.3368350
Dude, just try and change your whole art style to be honest (while your faces on the characters
are not bad, certain things like making the belly on your characters too thin makes it look like
a stick and that's no bueno, it doesn't look appealing like that), talking from experience as a
nsfw drawer myself too, you shouldn't make the thighs like that, like someone mention before it
makes it look like a bad packed sausage instead of a quite appealing thigh, you gotta work on the
knees of your characters and not make it to be too packed, give it more meat, it certainly looks
like if if was only bone damn lol; I hope this doesn't seem mean spirited, I really want you to
make it better so we can really appreciate completely your work, I still appreciate that you made
it, I certainly love the face of bowsette in this, but you can certainly do better man! hopefully
you tke this feedback and apply it, thanks for reading it anyways!
>> [_] Anonymous 11/16/18(Fri)07:14:11 No.3368351
lol
>> [_] Anonymous 11/16/18(Fri)08:54:33 No.3368362
>>3368320
saggy tits, anorexic everything, weird face, not completely nude.
>> [_] Anonymous 11/16/18(Fri)11:52:53 No.3368376
>>3368362
Ignore this anon's last bit
Partially clothed is better than fully nude
>> [_] Anonymous 11/16/18(Fri)12:07:13 No.3368379
Needs more sex appeal. The style is akin to a cartoon for kids about animals in a forest.
Draw more curves, accent the hips and feminine features. Right now it looks like an N64 SS
polygon frame is dancing
>> [_] Anonymous 11/16/18(Fri)12:08:58 No.3368380
>>3368320
needs to be thiccer
saggy titties
saggy looking thigh meat instead of nice and thicc
those kneeeees
the calves are too big
ultra large forehead
those lips
the really important bit is
>>3368333
>That's not "delicious thigh squish" that's "badly packed sausage"
>> [_] Anonymous 11/16/18(Fri)12:50:40 No.3368383
>>3368320
How about learning how to fucking draw?
>> [_] Anonymous 11/16/18(Fri)12:52:15 No.3368384
>>3368320
The only thing wrong with this is the actual design of the character. She looks like someones
weird saggy grandma because she's like thin and fat at the same time. The animation and movement
of the character is fine.
Overall don't delete it just because you're getting some negative feedback. This is definitely
someones fetish.
>> [_] Anonymous 11/16/18(Fri)12:55:26 No.3368385
the style is like you've never seen bowsette or even peach for that matter and someone just
described her to you and you were like "okay i'll give it a shot..."
just really wack body proportions and grotesque face. just looks like a strange misinterpretation
of the character its supposed to be. other than that the animation and pacing is fine. more
keyframes would be nice so she's not just jumping from one side of the screen to the other.
>> [_] Anonymous 11/16/18(Fri)16:05:10 No.3368401
>>3368320
If you can't tell what's wrong with it at a glance, there's something wrong with you.
>> [_] Anonymous 11/16/18(Fri)16:08:54 No.3368403
Of course it's from tumblr.
People need to learn some humility and actually get decent at things before they go around
showing everyone. This is the equivalent of buying a shitty old guitar and learning to play smoke
on the water out of key and off tempo and then going out and playing it for everyone you can get
to listen.
>> [_] Anonymous 11/16/18(Fri)16:10:26 No.3368404
HOLY SHIT THIS IS TERRIBLE
>> [_] Anonymous 11/16/18(Fri)16:13:13 No.3368405
>>3368308
Its shit on every level, the design is shit, she looks ugly, the music is absolut fucking shit.
You even fucked up your own link.
>> [_] Anonymous 11/16/18(Fri)18:03:40 No.3368422
Looking at your original art I can appreciate your attempt at animation, your technical lvl seems
fine and looks pretty polished overall despite your incredibly rough character design.
Speaking of your character design I'm thinking most people find the extremely exaggerated
proportions offputting, I'd like to put SLB's tumblr forward as an example for how to deal with
that shit in a satisfying manner (though still too out-there for some)
Keep at it my dude
>> [_] Anonymous 11/16/18(Fri)18:10:04 No.3368425
>>3368347
>>3368383
>>3368401
>>3368404
>>3368405
>>3368339
>>3368338
"real feedback"
>> [_] Anonymous 11/16/18(Fri)18:54:18 No.3368435
I'm afraid I don't have anything constructive to say, as I'm not artistically inclined. I only
speak up because I think it's important to encourage those who earnestly seek out criticism to
better themselves. I hope you will wipe away the anger and vitriol and discover something for
yourself. I'm rooting for you.
"If you only do things you're good at, you'll never learn anything." - John Cena
tl;dr fuck the haters
>> [_] Anonymous 11/16/18(Fri)19:19:38 No.3368438
>>3368344
The appeal is that they're so heavy and large, that they have to sag.
Her's aren't nearly big enough imho
>> [_] Noppers 11/16/18(Fri)20:13:32 No.3368447
The face is pretty darn bad, being too wide in the forehead and the shadow where the nose should
be makes it look like if it were dented inside in the middle, kind of like a bent coin.
The tits are saggy as if they were two loaves of wet bread.
The butt fangs are only comparable to count chocula.
The neck is way too thick and long for the proportions.
The legs start well but go to the rash when the boots start, like another anon said, badly
packaged sausages, those knees are also very very bad.
I would say the knees and facial structure need fixing.
Your artstyle works for some stuff, but definitely not for something that's intended to be sexy
or erotic.
>> [_] Anonymous 11/16/18(Fri)20:14:31 No.3368448
>>3368320
ya need more
LOOMIS
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>> [_] Anonymous 11/16/18(Fri)20:15:17 No.3368449
>>3368425
>Looking for "real feedback" on fucking 4chan of all places
lmao.
You'd sooner find more constructive criticism if this was featured in a roast comedy special.
>> [_] Anonymous 11/16/18(Fri)22:11:51 No.3368459
Don't use as many corners, like make some of it rounder.
Maybe the proportions are a bit off too, try something different with the face.
>> [_] Anonymous 11/16/18(Fri)22:21:39 No.3368460
If you're reading this author, probably so few people have this weird saggy tit fetish you have.
I think you posted another flash like this a couple weeks ago. To the average person this shit
you like is just disgusting and not in any way attractive. You'd fit in more on like a furry
website or something like deviant art.
>> [_] Anonymous 11/16/18(Fri)22:48:02 No.3368466
>>3368320
Her nipples are literally the size of her waist.
Too much forehead, not enough hair.
Fat legs, everything else skeletor.
Neck height is almost the length of her forearm.
Chest doesnt even exist.
Honestly most of the issues anyone on /f can point out are just common bias. If you want some
real feedback or to get properly chewed out, go to /ic/ and post in beginner thread or style
thread.
>> [_] Anonymous 11/16/18(Fri)22:53:42 No.3368467
>>3368460
Came here to post this.
>> [_] Anonymous 11/16/18(Fri)23:49:31 No.3368475
>>3368320
>Genuine question: is there anything specific about it that you guys find so off-putting?
Hmmm...
It looks like it was drawn by a crippled baby monkey with a broken crayon. Not trying to dig,
just an observation.
it really doesn't even work as caricature, it's just really bad scribbling.
Work on style, like, alot, and spend more than a day farting out a flash. Good art takes time and
care. And style.
>> [_] Anonymous 11/17/18(Sat)00:19:08 No.3368479
>>3368448
seconding this
moar loomis
