File: regret.swf-(8.65 MB, 1920x1080, Other)
[_] Some shit I made. Anonymous 05/22/20(Fri)12:01:06 No.3429144
I'm going to assume you clicked on the SWF before reading this, so I will apologize about the
horrid voice acting ahead of time. I have no budget.
Anyway, I posted this back when only the menu was functioning, and you guys helped me out with
the issues I was having with it. Now I can safely say the entire animatic for this is done, and
the more I think about it, the more of a feeling I get that I regret a lot of decisions I made
when making this thing.
Before I go about actually animating and finalizing all the scenes, I just need some critique on
this crap in it's current state so I can make a list of changes that need to be made. Don't hold
anything back; every bit of criticism will only help out in the long run. Thanks in advance.
Marked for deletion (old).
>> [_] Anonymous 05/22/20(Fri)14:26:58 No.3429153
use text to speech for voice acting.
>> [_] Anonymous 05/22/20(Fri)14:52:37 No.3429155
>>3429144
im not the person you want for feedback, i thought it was great as is, lol
>> [_] Anonymous 05/22/20(Fri)15:40:28 No.3429168
yeah, idk
this smells of early newgrounds era furry flashes, if that's what you were going for it's fine
>> [_] Anonymous 05/22/20(Fri)16:20:12 No.3429176
>>3429144
I enjoyed it a lot! Blackheart was very cute!
>> [_] Anonymous 05/22/20(Fri)16:38:24 No.3429177
>>3429144
That's actually pretty cute. Like
>>3429168
Says, it really reminds me of that kind of thing.
As for VA's, I don't know, but you could hit up /soc/ voice threads and ask there.
Also The tower looks like a benis lol
>> [_] Anonymous 05/22/20(Fri)17:53:28 No.3429190
>>3429144
It's quite sweet, can't give any criticism though, not because there ain't any to give, I'm just
bad at criticizing, sorry.
Best of luck with the project.
>> [_] :v 05/22/20(Fri)18:12:56 No.3429194
Certainly can't fault you for ambition, nj /f/gt
>> [_] Anonymous 05/22/20(Fri)19:15:04 No.3429200
Cough
I'm a VA, you need help?
>> [_] Anonymous 05/22/20(Fri)19:35:02 No.3429203
It's almost a good start, just needs some actual world building / character development, because
there's only like two scenes worth of that, not enough to make anyone invested.
>> [_] Anonymous 05/22/20(Fri)22:17:05 No.3429222
>>3429144
I'm surprised it's not porn and happy someone's making a legit flash animation in 2020!
Hope you'll share the finished flash result with us and not just make it a video on youtube. (You
can upload the flash animation on boards.swfchan.net if it ends up too big for /f/ and link it
from here.)
>> [_] Anonymous 05/22/20(Fri)22:34:03 No.3429225
My suggestions:
Cut the narration out as much as you possibly can. The same rules as filmmaking apply here. Show,
don't tell. Narration is for books and flash is a visual medium.
I don't feel like the minigames really add anything, certainly they aren't necessary. Unless you
want to make the whole thing a point-and-click adventure I would stick to just animation
>> [_] Anonymous 05/22/20(Fri)22:40:20 No.3429228
OP here.
>>3429155
>>3429168
>>3429176
>>3429190
>>3429177
Thanks. Good to know that it is somewhat heading in the right direction.
>this smells of early newgrounds era furry flashes
Yeh, I was trying somewhat to evoke that feeling around the third act. Admitidly, this is just a
redo of a project I made for school two years ago, when I was still a cringe teenager. It's not
something that is to be taken too seriously. Lul.
>As for VA's, I don't know, but you could hit up /soc/ voice threads and ask there
I didn't know /soc/ had VA threads; I was under the impression that place was nothing but
Facebook plebs trying to get laid. Thanks for the info, I'll definitely keep it in mind.
>>3429200
Thank you. I'd take you up on the offer, but I don't know what I could offer in return; I'm a bit
short on gas station buxx at the moment.
>>3429203
Yee, I regret not rewriting the script to have more buildup. Thanks for the advice. I will add an
extra act in between the second and third that goes a bit more in-depth about the scenario.
