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[_] [L] Feedback please Coolguys !eNwncubcDk 03/05/11(Sat)09:23 No.1477547
Here's a flash I'm working on.
I'd appreciate some constructive criticism.
The monkey gets attacked by a bulding-robot.
Marked for deletion (old).
>> [_] Anonymous 03/05/11(Sat)09:57 No.1477568
it's shit
>> [_] Anonymous 03/05/11(Sat)10:01 No.1477572
It's shit.
>> [_] Anonymous 03/05/11(Sat)10:03 No.1477574
Well, it's pretty raw. Needs a lot of work.
It would be nicer with more interaction between the monkey and the robot. I can't tell they are
fighting. Also, I wouldn't know the blocky face was a robot if you didn't tell me (I wasn't even
sure it was a face). You should make it clearer that the building transforms into a robot, and
make it clearer that the robot is attacking the monkey. The perspective shifting before the robot
was revealed was a little off, but it was interesting. The monkey was interesting too, it would
be nice to see it move or show more emotion. (reacting to the robot, or maybe the banana.) Oh, I
liked the paralax shift in the cityscape opening shot. You have a long way to go, but that's a
start. Hope that helped! (and um... isn't NASA from America, not UK?)
>> [_] Coolguys !eNwncubcDk 03/05/11(Sat)10:08 No.1477577
>>1477574
Thank you! Your comment is appreciated. I plan to make the monkey look scared and be chased. I'm
first completing the building turning into a robot.
The NASA uk was an inside joke.
>> [_] Anonymous 03/05/11(Sat)10:13 No.1477578
Was a bit a waste of my time but you could work on the transitioning.
to be honest though i had no clue what was going on so apply yourself on the art a bit more.
>> [_] Anonymous 03/05/11(Sat)10:13 No.1477579
>>1477577
>inside jokes being used outside of social circle they were formed in
>nope.jpg
>> [_] Anonymous 03/05/11(Sat)10:16 No.1477582
YEEEAAAAHH IM DRIVING DOWN THE ROAD...
>> [_] Coolguys !eNwncubcDk 03/05/11(Sat)10:26 No.1477586
I'll be sure to make a fight scene.
I'll aim to make it clear whats going on.
>> [_] Anonymous 03/05/11(Sat)11:17 No.1477595
learn to art
>> [_] Anonymous 03/05/11(Sat)17:12 No.1477732
try not to make it shit
>> [_] Messed up :@ 03/05/11(Sat)17:21 No.1477734
like my name say's it
