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[_] [L] Straight Shota loop Anon 1125721 New work, took the advice of someone that said 'show the action' Marked for deletion (old).
>> [_] Anon 1125726 His face... his face alone looks strong enough to lift a train off the tracks. Something just seems off. But maybe it's just my preference that the women are stronger in straight shota.
>> [_] Anon 1125773 Oh my god proportions. Jesus, this is terrible.
>> [_] Anon 1125775 >># It's not professional, so who cares? From the OP's description, the guy/gal/thing is open to constructive criticism.
>> [_] Iyae 1125782 Always funny. I do something realistic and get 'pig disgusting realism', I do something cartoony and anime styled I get 'OH LAWD PROPORTIONS' haha. But, be specific, what is very off about the proportions? I know the chicks head is huge (too huge, noticed it after a while) Arms and legs should be the correct length. Her arms probably could use a bit more width to them as well as the size of her hands. Is her torso the correct width? Is the boys neck too thick? I actually think his torso is a wee-bit too thick from the side view. Comeon people, detail details. I can't improve if you just yell 'lol shit sucks'
>> [_] Anon 1125783 Her left hand looks like a foot
>> [_] Anon 1125786 http://img21.imageshack.us/img21/9784/ss ssssssr.jpg I just MS painted that, which improves his face a lot. Her hands should be bigger than her arms, and spreading out the fingers on her left hand should make it look less like a foot.
>> [_] Iyae 1125787 >># And I just realized the boys hand is facing the wrong direction. Alright, duely noted. Watch the hands so they aren't inside out and looking like a foot. NEXT! :3c
>> [_] Anon 1125788 >># here, and I had no idea >># posted before I did. That's 2 people thinking the exact same thing, so the hand is where I'd start.
>> [_] Anon 1125789 What do you mean his hand is wrong? The thumb and pinky are both short compared to the middle 3, so I didn't notice anything odd.
>> [_] Anon 1125790 >># lol shit sucks huge head, left arm looks like foot.torso is bend ,some thing is hanging on her knee,and the dude doesnt even look like he is animeish
>> [_] Anon 1125793 >># Noted. Attach everything to everything else That way the boys hand doesn't look like a tumor growing from her leg. NEXT!
>> [_] Anon 1125795 >># its the hand ,goddamnit im laughing hard
>> [_] Iyae 1125797 >># Don't half ass the hands and actually DEFINE them to look like a fucking hand so it doesn't cause people to lol at the tumor hand. NOTED NEXT!
>> [_] Oblivionmark5 1125798 this is awesome
>> [_] Anon 1125801 http://img16.imageshack.us/img16/2310/ss ssssssf.jpg If you close your eyes and ignore my shitty can't-be-fucked-to-install-photoshop-aga in skills, it doesn't look too bad with wider arms.
>> [_] Anon 1125804 >># boob physics. also i think the eyes are wrong.
>> [_] Anon 1125806 >># like if the right eye was open it looks directly in the camera, but left one look directly at the dude
>> [_] Anon 1125807 >># You're damned right, she looks anorexic with such thin arms. That looks better (even with the shitty MS paintness) NOTED >># Boob physics? I thought I got the secondary action of the breasts decently well done, am I wrong? And the eyes probably are wrong, they are hardly my strong part. NOTED God I love you guys. You give me more to work with than those kissups on FA. Speaking of improvement... I need to decided my next flash loop/animation WHAT SHOULD I DO NIGGERS?
>> [_] Anon 1125809 >># Do you only do SS and we should decide within that, or what?
>> [_] Anon 1125811 >># Gals with LIGHT brown skin.
>> [_] Anon 1125812 >># I'm pretty leanient, but I don't do anyhting REALLY out there. Loli, shota, tentacle, ss, rape, etc. Totally cool with
>> [_] Anon 1125814 >># this
>> [_] Anon 1125815 >># Since 2 people want light brown skin, I won't go against that, but how about a dominant female this time?
>> [_] Anon 1125816 >># make her ride the dude and smile sexy like half of the dudes body and her on top
>> [_] Anon 1125817 >># >># That was already formulated in my mind. Alrighty, next flash confirmed for brawl: Light brown chick domineering a young innocent boy
>> [_] Anon 1125818 >># so do you have a profile on some site?
>> [_] Anon 1125819 >># also how old are you ?
>> [_] Anon 1125821 >># what is this, a date service?
>> [_] Iyae 1125824 >># I do, but I'll keep it a secret for now :3c >># Er, 21. Old as hell, I know. Not sure why you're asking though?
>> [_] Anon 1125831 >># well it looks like drawn by a 12-15 yo so i askd no offense
>> [_] NotBanana 1125857 Give me a sec and I'll help you with this one.
>> [_] JUST FOR YOU, STRAIGHT FROM /IC/ NotBanana 1125868 http://img163.imageshack.us/img163/5850/ lolanatomy.png Well here you go, I did what I could do within a short amount of time. Next time, if your having trouble go for a reference picture. Also heres loomis' books.http://alexhays.com/loomis/
>> [_] Anon 1125873 >># That's some pretty good constructive criticism, but oh help me I laughed
>> [_] Iyae 1125884 >># lol loomis. I've been studying him, this may sound fucked up but I've been not using reference for my animations. On this next one I've actually cracked open Pose Maniacs and found a pose that similar to what I'm going for. Expect something not so shitty. Also, hopefully I'm not making myself look TOO terrible, I'm attaching a WIP of a regular drawing that isn't flashy to make me appear less artistically retarded http://img525.imageshack.us/img525/3472/ drawingbf.jpg Here's the sketch for the next anim, still gotta tweak it alot (obviously, she has no arms and the boy is a bit odd) Debating where to place her hands, probably gonna bend her more too, etc. http://img214.imageshack.us/img214/5364/ 73718917.jpg