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[_] [L] Straight Shota loop Anonymous 11/27/09(Fri)14:01 No.1125721
New work, took the advice of someone that said 'show the action'
Marked for deletion (old).
>> [_] Anonymous 11/27/09(Fri)14:24 No.1125726
His face... his face alone looks strong enough to lift a train off the tracks. Something just
seems off.
But maybe it's just my preference that the women are stronger in straight shota.
>> [_] Anonymous 11/27/09(Fri)16:59 No.1125773
Oh my god proportions.
Jesus, this is terrible.
>> [_] Anonymous 11/27/09(Fri)17:06 No.1125775
>>1125773
It's not professional, so who cares? From the OP's description, the guy/gal/thing is open to
constructive criticism.
>> [_] Iyae 11/27/09(Fri)17:23 No.1125782
Always funny. I do something realistic and get 'pig disgusting realism', I do something cartoony
and anime styled I get 'OH LAWD PROPORTIONS' haha.
But, be specific, what is very off about the proportions? I know the chicks head is huge (too
huge, noticed it after a while) Arms and legs should be the correct length. Her arms probably
could use a bit more width to them as well as the size of her hands. Is her torso the correct
width? Is the boys neck too thick? I actually think his torso is a wee-bit too thick from the
side view.
Comeon people, detail details. I can't improve if you just yell 'lol shit sucks'
>> [_] Anonymous 11/27/09(Fri)17:26 No.1125783
Her left hand looks like a foot
>> [_] Anonymous 11/27/09(Fri)17:29 No.1125786
http://img21.imageshack.us/img21/9784/ssssssssr.jpg
I just MS painted that, which improves his face a lot.
Her hands should be bigger than her arms, and spreading out the fingers on her left hand should
make it look less like a foot.
>> [_] Iyae 11/27/09(Fri)17:30 No.1125787
>>1125783
And I just realized the boys hand is facing the wrong direction. Alright, duely noted.
Watch the hands so they aren't inside out and looking like a foot.
NEXT! :3c
>> [_] Anonymous 11/27/09(Fri)17:31 No.1125788
>>1125786 here, and I had no idea >>1125783 posted before I did. That's 2 people thinking the
exact same thing, so the hand is where I'd start.
>> [_] Anonymous 11/27/09(Fri)17:32 No.1125789
What do you mean his hand is wrong? The thumb and pinky are both short compared to the middle 3,
so I didn't notice anything odd.
>> [_] Anonymous 11/27/09(Fri)17:33 No.1125790
>>1125782
lol shit sucks
huge head, left arm looks like foot.torso is bend ,some thing is hanging on her knee,and the dude
doesnt even look like he is animeish
>> [_] Anonymous 11/27/09(Fri)17:36 No.1125793
>>1125790
Noted. Attach everything to everything else
That way the boys hand doesn't look like a tumor growing from her leg.
NEXT!
>> [_] Anonymous 11/27/09(Fri)17:38 No.1125795
>>1125793
its the hand ,goddamnit im laughing hard
>> [_] Iyae 11/27/09(Fri)17:41 No.1125797
>>1125795
Don't half ass the hands and actually DEFINE them to look like a fucking hand so it doesn't cause
people to lol at the tumor hand.
NOTED
NEXT!
>> [_] Oblivionmark5 11/27/09(Fri)17:41 No.1125798
this is awesome
>> [_] Anonymous 11/27/09(Fri)17:44 No.1125801
http://img16.imageshack.us/img16/2310/ssssssssf.jpg
If you close your eyes and ignore my shitty can't-be-fucked-to-install-photoshop-again skills, it
doesn't look too bad with wider arms.
>> [_] Anonymous 11/27/09(Fri)17:48 No.1125804
>>1125797
boob physics. also i think the eyes are wrong.
>> [_] Anonymous 11/27/09(Fri)17:51 No.1125806
>>1125804
like if the right eye was open it looks directly in the camera, but left one look directly at the
dude
>> [_] Anonymous 11/27/09(Fri)17:52 No.1125807
>>1125801
You're damned right, she looks anorexic with such thin arms. That looks better (even with the
shitty MS paintness)
NOTED
>>1125804
Boob physics? I thought I got the secondary action of the breasts decently well done, am I wrong?
And the eyes probably are wrong, they are hardly my strong part.
NOTED
God I love you guys. You give me more to work with than those kissups on FA.
Speaking of improvement...
I need to decided my next flash loop/animation
WHAT SHOULD I DO NIGGERS?
>> [_] Anonymous 11/27/09(Fri)17:53 No.1125809
>>1125807
Do you only do SS and we should decide within that, or what?
>> [_] Anonymous 11/27/09(Fri)17:55 No.1125811
>>1125807
Gals with LIGHT brown skin.
>> [_] Anonymous 11/27/09(Fri)17:55 No.1125812
>>1125809
I'm pretty leanient, but I don't do anyhting REALLY out there.
Loli, shota, tentacle, ss, rape, etc. Totally cool with
>> [_] Anonymous 11/27/09(Fri)17:57 No.1125814
>>1125811
this
>> [_] Anonymous 11/27/09(Fri)18:00 No.1125815
>>1125812
Since 2 people want light brown skin, I won't go against that, but how about a dominant female
this time?
>> [_] Anonymous 11/27/09(Fri)18:03 No.1125816
>>1125815
make her ride the dude and smile sexy
like half of the dudes body and her on top
>> [_] Anonymous 11/27/09(Fri)18:05 No.1125817
>>1125816
>>1125815
That was already formulated in my mind.
Alrighty, next flash confirmed for brawl: Light brown chick domineering a young innocent boy
>> [_] Anonymous 11/27/09(Fri)18:06 No.1125818
>>1125817
so do you have a profile on some site?
>> [_] Anonymous 11/27/09(Fri)18:09 No.1125819
>>1125817
also how old are you ?
>> [_] Anonymous 11/27/09(Fri)18:11 No.1125821
>>1125819
what is this, a date service?
>> [_] Iyae 11/27/09(Fri)18:15 No.1125824
>>1125818
I do, but I'll keep it a secret for now :3c
>>1125819
Er, 21. Old as hell, I know. Not sure why you're asking though?
>> [_] Anonymous 11/27/09(Fri)18:23 No.1125831
>>1125824
well it looks like drawn by a 12-15 yo so i askd
no offense
>> [_] NotBanana 11/27/09(Fri)19:16 No.1125857
Give me a sec and I'll help you with this one.
>> [_] JUST FOR YOU, STRAIGHT FROM /IC/ NotBanana 11/27/09(Fri)19:28 No.1125868
http://img163.imageshack.us/img163/5850/lolanatomy.png
Well here you go, I did what I could do within a short amount of time. Next time, if your having
trouble go for a reference picture. Also heres loomis' books.http://alexhays.com/loomis/
>> [_] Anonymous 11/27/09(Fri)19:30 No.1125873
>>1125868
That's some pretty good constructive criticism, but oh help me I laughed
>> [_] Iyae 11/27/09(Fri)19:40 No.1125884
>>1125868
lol loomis. I've been studying him, this may sound fucked up but I've been not using reference
for my animations.
On this next one I've actually cracked open Pose Maniacs and found a pose that similar to what
I'm going for.
Expect something not so shitty.
Also, hopefully I'm not making myself look TOO terrible, I'm attaching a WIP of a regular drawing
that isn't flashy to make me appear less artistically retarded
http://img525.imageshack.us/img525/3472/drawingbf.jpg
Here's the sketch for the next anim, still gotta tweak it alot (obviously, she has no arms and
the boy is a bit odd) Debating where to place her hands, probably gonna bend her more too, etc.
http://img214.imageshack.us/img214/5364/73718917.jpg
