File: Amy Test 2.swf-(67 KB, 700x500, Hentai)
[_] Anonymous 06/12/13(Wed)00:11 No.2000829
Ok, so I think I have this licking animation where I want it.
What improvements do you suggest before I go on to the blowjob?
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>> [_] RagaSonic 06/12/13(Wed)00:24 No.2000837
^^ Nice job.
>> [_] Anonymous 06/12/13(Wed)00:29 No.2000841
Shitty test, no questions to answer, results are lack luster.
>> [_] Anonymous 06/12/13(Wed)00:34 No.2000848
>clitoris is a marble
gg I lost
>> [_] Anonymous 06/12/13(Wed)00:44 No.2000851
>>2000841
anon pls, real advice
>>2000848
the original reference im using looks like a marble, so i think that'll stay.
any suggestions for the animation?
>> [_] Anonymous 06/12/13(Wed)00:49 No.2000854
Boobs lack gravity. Move her hand left, and boob down
>> [_] Anonymous 06/12/13(Wed)00:51 No.2000856
you better have anal in this
>> [_] Anonymous 06/12/13(Wed)00:56 No.2000860
>>2000829
so far thats really great, i would suggest fixing the clit, and maybe making the breast hang with
a bit more gravity, they seem really stiff.
>> [_] Anonymous 06/12/13(Wed)00:56 No.2000861
looks real nice, with fair qaulity animation
>> [_] Anonymous 06/12/13(Wed)01:22 No.2000879
>>2000854
fixed boobs, moved hand
>>2000856
Yep. It'll have Lick/Blowjob/Anal/Vag/Threesome. Thankfully Tojyo did a set of similar pictures,
so I can have different poses.
>>2000860
I'll fix the clit, and I the think boobs should be fixed now
>>2000861
thanks
>> [_] Anonymous 06/12/13(Wed)01:36 No.2000886
Quite a few things here that could be improved. It's a good starting point though.
Something no one has mentioned thus far is the penis. You should make the dick more uniform in
its size as opposed to looking like a volcano. As for the squishing animation that goes with it,
it'd be better since you're going for the cartoony look for it to squeeze forward. Also, if
possible, cut off the edge of the guy, because looking at his ass is painful. Reminds me of what
Hank Hill's ass would look like.
Something else I am seeing is that you are putting a lot of detail into the ass area, and then
lacking detail elsewhere. While I do love a detailed ass, skimping on detail elsewhere just
detracts from the overall flash.
>> [_] Anonymous 06/12/13(Wed)01:37 No.2000887
When I take a look at her actual base on the ground, it looks like she seems to be floating. Her
knees and weight shifts too much just from coil and recoil from a dick suck.
The bouncing of her ass and tail is interesting. I'm not saying it's bad, because cartoony
bounces tend to be very over exaggerated, However the way it bounces is a little odd. Mainly
because the bounce carries far into the back of her butt. Normally it would start mid way up her
thigh, traveling up her butt at the height, and end near the middle of the back of her ass.
however, the entire thing is uni-formally bouncing.
Another thing to consider on the topic of bouncing are her tits. If I removed her arm and traced
where the tip connected to her chest, I bet there'd be hardly any skin connected judging by the
angle it starts curving down by the time it reaches her arm.
>> [_] Anonymous 06/12/13(Wed)01:38 No.2000889
I would make it more round and bring it back so that nearly half of the tit is showing. Because
we must keep in the spirit of her breast size. No body likes a big breasted Amy. That'd be just
sacrilege!
As for the sounds, I do like the digital plop effect there. it's a nice touch. Good sounds are
something you gotta work for, I know that all too well.
If you'd like more critiques or help with sound editing / sample bites I can definitely help ya
out. I've helped out Rock Candy a lot with his work. Heck I basically built him up since he
didn't know nearly anything about anatomy way back then. Couldn't swing him into vagina though,
man I tried...
allifrend@gmail.com
>> [_] Anonymous 06/12/13(Wed)01:58 No.2000899
>>2000886
-Penis shape did seem weird. Fixed.
-You mean squeeze forward after immediately after it has left her mouth? I was thinking about
that, but it would be quite cartoony. I'd have to experiment with it.
-LOL, yeah i'll get rid of dat ass. I actually only meant for half of his torso to be seen.
-I'm not sure what you mean by making it more round. Do you mean mean make it so only a small
portion of her boob is showing?
-As for the sound, yes I would love any other samples you can get. Mostly anything related to amy
sounding sexual. Might have to pull stuff from Sonic X, because there's practically no sexual
sounding content from any of the games unless you can get a voice that sounds similar.
In any case, I wouldn't worry about going all out on the resources yet. Perhaps when I have more
key parts done. I also had help from Ragasonic since the .fla was originally his, and of course
Tojyo for the original art.
>> [_] Anonymous 06/12/13(Wed)02:00 No.2000902
>>2000886
>>2000887
>>2000889
tldr its porn, just enjoy it
>> [_] Anonymous 06/12/13(Wed)02:01 No.2000905
>>2000889
also i like big boobed amy...
when I release another version i'll probably just have an option. thankfully i know a bit of
action script
>> [_] Anonymous 06/12/13(Wed)02:07 No.2000907
Ahh this flash file I assume is the unfinished flash file. http://e621.net/data/
f4/74/f4744f0bd5d235afe145d9f5e21a1a63.swf
Basically how the boob is right now, you need to bring it closer to her chest to make the anatomy
work without looking weird. The bouncing is relatively fine for now. I'm sure I can find sounds
easy enough. My email is up so let me know in more detail the kinds of stuff you want.
>> [_] Anonymous 06/12/13(Wed)02:12 No.2000909
>>2000907
yes I have him on skype, and I believe he is going to finish his tentacle version as well.
i'm not sure exactly what sounds I'll need yet. I usually do those after each scene is done. I'll
let you know though
>> [_] Anonymous 06/12/13(Wed)04:40 No.2000974
You need to make this not look like pieces of cardboard being moved by ropes.
>> [_] Anonymous 06/12/13(Wed)05:24 No.2000990
>>2000829
Fix the Gloopy *plop* sound effect. Dammit, it's not very right for the animation.
