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[_] halp idontevencareanymore 05/20/14(Tue)12:20 No.2390047
Oh dear, it's been too long since I last posted anything here. I'm still being a lazy piece of
shit and haven't done much since then. A few coding stuff and a little more flavor for the title
screen.
Anyways, I want to know how's everything looking. [Name]. I just want to know what I did wrong.
Probably many things.
Marked for deletion (old).
>> [_] Anonymous 05/20/14(Tue)12:25 No.2390049
The most glaring mistake is that not every girl is a Zora.
>> [_] Anonymous 05/20/14(Tue)12:40 No.2390058
>the courage that you poses
"poses" should be possess
At the B&W drawing of Zelda, her left cheek is a different shape than her right cheek, idk if
shading will make that look better or not. Her arms also seem to be different sizes. Saria's left
hand is really stubby, and the foreshortening on Ruto's face seems a bit off IMO.
>> [_] Anonymous 05/20/14(Tue)13:00 No.2390076
not going to help you with story/art critic because Im not good at that but it might be cool to
add both pre and after time jump but that might be a lot of work. Nabooru ss would be nice
>> [_] Anonymous 05/20/14(Tue)13:06 No.2390083
>>2390047
Are you just trying to animate the bad zelda doujin?
>> [_] idontevencareanymore 05/20/14(Tue)13:15 No.2390090
Bring OP, I think I should at least respond
>>2390058
Fuck, I can't believe I didn't catch that misspelling. Yeah, Zelda's arm is something I can fix
easily, but I am wondering what I can do to fix Saria's arm. I think the hand just needs to to be
near the bottom of the leg and in a new pose.
>>2390083
Not exactly. It's more a game based around the idea/plot. I hope that makes any sense.
>> [_] Anonymous 05/20/14(Tue)13:29 No.2390097
>>2390090
your doing a good job anon
>> [_] Anonymous 05/20/14(Tue)14:01 No.2390120
>>2390047
"There echos a legend" Should be Echoes
"Done with the battles he onced was across time" You wot, m8? But really, i'm confused.
"Intoduce your semen etc" Introduce, just missing an r.
Whatever-her-name-is (Second B&W drawing) had an odd hip and leg connection. Just lengthen it a
little; i'd screencap and show you what I mean, but that will come later.
Other than those spelling mistakes and shiz, it's pretty good so far. Far as flashes go, this
one's a generous 6/10 right now. Interested to see how you'll progress, should make a blog to
post updates on.
>> [_] Xen0m0rpH !QFjgKKsUc6 05/20/14(Tue)15:43 No.2390209
>>2390047
Finally.
I was wondering when you would post again.
Still waiting though.
>> [_] Anonymous 05/20/14(Tue)16:04 No.2390240
>>2390090
Not a loli fan, give me the adult versions and we'll talk.
>> [_] Anonymous 05/20/14(Tue)16:16 No.2390254
1st pic: shirt collar on his right side is missing the v-fold, right calf is large, even taking
perspective into account.The width of the triangle on the cursor is about the width of reduction
needed.
1st B&W drawing: the hand on the left is in a slightly impossible hand position. Foot on the
right looks 2 sizes to large.(unless shes wearing a dress, but ts really hard to tell in B&W w/
no shading.
2nd drawing: looks like a thorn in her left nipple, I know that's the fold of her arm but I cant
unsee it now. BTW, your faces and hair are sweet. Mostly its hands, but hands are hard as fuck so
might I suggest alwyas drawing the hands doing something(ie grasping pulling) they are easier if
they have purpose.
3rd: pupils aren't centered in the irises and she looks slightly derpy, their seems to be fins on
her toes on her right foot but not on the left.
>> [_] Anonymous 05/20/14(Tue)16:37 No.2390269
>>2390240
Seconded.
>> [_] Anonymous 05/20/14(Tue)17:24 No.2390304
I support the loli, make what you want.
