File: regret.swf-(8.65 MB, 1920x1080, Other)
[_] Some shit I made. Anon 3429144 I'm going to assume you clicked on the SWF before reading this, so I will apologize about the horrid voice acting ahead of time. I have no budget. Anyway, I posted this back when only the menu was functioning, and you guys helped me out with the issues I was having with it. Now I can safely say the entire animatic for this is done, and the more I think about it, the more of a feeling I get that I regret a lot of decisions I made when making this thing. Before I go about actually animating and finalizing all the scenes, I just need some critique on this crap in it's current state so I can make a list of changes that need to be made. Don't hold anything back; every bit of criticism will only help out in the long run. Thanks in advance. Marked for deletion (old).
>> [_] Anon 3429153 use text to speech for voice acting.
>> [_] Anon 3429155 >># im not the person you want for feedback, i thought it was great as is, lol
>> [_] Anon 3429168 yeah, idk this smells of early newgrounds era furry flashes, if that's what you were going for it's fine
>> [_] Anon 3429176 >># I enjoyed it a lot! Blackheart was very cute!
>> [_] Anon 3429177 >># That's actually pretty cute. Like >># Says, it really reminds me of that kind of thing. As for VA's, I don't know, but you could hit up /soc/ voice threads and ask there. Also The tower looks like a benis lol
>> [_] Anon 3429190 >># It's quite sweet, can't give any criticism though, not because there ain't any to give, I'm just bad at criticizing, sorry. Best of luck with the project.
>> [_] :v 3429194 Certainly can't fault you for ambition, nj /f/gt
>> [_] Anon 3429200 Cough I'm a VA, you need help?
>> [_] Anon 3429203 It's almost a good start, just needs some actual world building / character development, because there's only like two scenes worth of that, not enough to make anyone invested.
>> [_] Anon 3429222 >># I'm surprised it's not porn and happy someone's making a legit flash animation in 2020! Hope you'll share the finished flash result with us and not just make it a video on youtube. (You can upload the flash animation on boards.swfchan.net if it ends up too big for /f/ and link it from here.)
>> [_] Anon 3429225 My suggestions: Cut the narration out as much as you possibly can. The same rules as filmmaking apply here. Show, don't tell. Narration is for books and flash is a visual medium. I don't feel like the minigames really add anything, certainly they aren't necessary. Unless you want to make the whole thing a point-and-click adventure I would stick to just animation
>> [_] Anon 3429228 OP here. >># >># >># >># >># Thanks. Good to know that it is somewhat heading in the right direction. >this smells of early newgrounds era furry flashes Yeh, I was trying somewhat to evoke that feeling around the third act. Admitidly, this is just a redo of a project I made for school two years ago, when I was still a cringe teenager. It's not something that is to be taken too seriously. Lul. >As for VA's, I don't know, but you could hit up /soc/ voice threads and ask there I didn't know /soc/ had VA threads; I was under the impression that place was nothing but Facebook plebs trying to get laid. Thanks for the info, I'll definitely keep it in mind. >># Thank you. I'd take you up on the offer, but I don't know what I could offer in return; I'm a bit short on gas station buxx at the moment. >># Yee, I regret not rewriting the script to have more buildup. Thanks for the advice. I will add an extra act in between the second and third that goes a bit more in-depth about the scenario.