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Original location: https://boards.4chan.org/f/thread/3429144/some-shit-i-ma…
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File: regret.swf-(8.65 MB, 1920x1080, Other) [_] Some shit I made. Anonymous 05/22/20(Fri)12:01:06 No.3429144 I'm going to assume you clicked on the SWF before reading this, so I will apologize about the horrid voice acting ahead of time. I have no budget. Anyway, I posted this back when only the menu was functioning, and you guys helped me out with the issues I was having with it. Now I can safely say the entire animatic for this is done, and the more I think about it, the more of a feeling I get that I regret a lot of decisions I made when making this thing. Before I go about actually animating and finalizing all the scenes, I just need some critique on this crap in it's current state so I can make a list of changes that need to be made. Don't hold anything back; every bit of criticism will only help out in the long run. Thanks in advance. Marked for deletion (old). >> [_] Anonymous 05/22/20(Fri)14:26:58 No.3429153 use text to speech for voice acting. >> [_] Anonymous 05/22/20(Fri)14:52:37 No.3429155 >>3429144 im not the person you want for feedback, i thought it was great as is, lol >> [_] Anonymous 05/22/20(Fri)15:40:28 No.3429168 yeah, idk this smells of early newgrounds era furry flashes, if that's what you were going for it's fine >> [_] Anonymous 05/22/20(Fri)16:20:12 No.3429176 >>3429144 I enjoyed it a lot! Blackheart was very cute! >> [_] Anonymous 05/22/20(Fri)16:38:24 No.3429177 >>3429144 That's actually pretty cute. Like >>3429168 Says, it really reminds me of that kind of thing. As for VA's, I don't know, but you could hit up /soc/ voice threads and ask there. Also The tower looks like a benis lol >> [_] Anonymous 05/22/20(Fri)17:53:28 No.3429190 >>3429144 It's quite sweet, can't give any criticism though, not because there ain't any to give, I'm just bad at criticizing, sorry. Best of luck with the project. >> [_] :v 05/22/20(Fri)18:12:56 No.3429194 Certainly can't fault you for ambition, nj /f/gt >> [_] Anonymous 05/22/20(Fri)19:15:04 No.3429200 Cough I'm a VA, you need help? >> [_] Anonymous 05/22/20(Fri)19:35:02 No.3429203 It's almost a good start, just needs some actual world building / character development, because there's only like two scenes worth of that, not enough to make anyone invested. >> [_] Anonymous 05/22/20(Fri)22:17:05 No.3429222 >>3429144 I'm surprised it's not porn and happy someone's making a legit flash animation in 2020! Hope you'll share the finished flash result with us and not just make it a video on youtube. (You can upload the flash animation on boards.swfchan.net if it ends up too big for /f/ and link it from here.) >> [_] Anonymous 05/22/20(Fri)22:34:03 No.3429225 My suggestions: Cut the narration out as much as you possibly can. The same rules as filmmaking apply here. Show, don't tell. Narration is for books and flash is a visual medium. I don't feel like the minigames really add anything, certainly they aren't necessary. Unless you want to make the whole thing a point-and-click adventure I would stick to just animation >> [_] Anonymous 05/22/20(Fri)22:40:20 No.3429228 OP here. >>3429155 >>3429168 >>3429176 >>3429190 >>3429177 Thanks. Good to know that it is somewhat heading in the right direction. >this smells of early newgrounds era furry flashes Yeh, I was trying somewhat to evoke that feeling around the third act. Admitidly, this is just a redo of a project I made for school two years ago, when I was still a cringe teenager. It's not something that is to be taken too seriously. Lul. >As for VA's, I don't know, but you could hit up /soc/ voice threads and ask there I didn't know /soc/ had VA threads; I was under the impression that place was nothing but Facebook plebs trying to get laid. Thanks for the info, I'll definitely keep it in mind. >>3429200 Thank you. I'd take you up on the offer, but I don't know what I could offer in return; I'm a bit short on gas station buxx at the moment. >>3429203 Yee, I regret not rewriting the script to have more buildup. Thanks for the advice. I will add an extra act in between the second and third that goes a bit more in-depth about the scenario.